Sela Locke

Ooh, here's the thing, Ink. (Can I call you that?) See, he actually only has a slight Aussie accent, but I missed that when I edited. But I still fixed ...

Thanks! Yes, I'll look it over. ^^

It was interesting, but as Heather said, you really need to develop the characters, and maybe start a little earlier. I mean, we don't even know what any of the ...

Ditto Mizz! I didn't notice anything typo-wise, it was just too funny a story! I used to imagine things like this when I was little. ^^ Good luck, you have ...

The lack of punctuation made the story quite boring, and it really was chronically clique. I'd suggest trying to make something that a lot of other people haven't already made. ...

JF certainly hit the nail on the head. However, I have a few quick things to say as well. Is there a reason you couldn't elaborate on the mission? I ...

Ooh, Reliant K. They're delicious. What's your favorite song by them? Hmm, I only have about an album full on my Itunes... Probably "Who I am hates who I've been" ...

Anyway, welcome to YWS, it's lovely to meet you. What genre is the novel you're currently working on? Or what genres do you prefer to write in? If you'd like ...

It wasn’t Keylaia’s fault. She’d just been running down the beach in her red tankini when it happened. She ran right into someone, and fell, hitting her head on a ...

Likeyyyyy! Claire reminds me of a lot of people mixed up, including myself. When I bug you, you always react the way Trey did. So ha! Why is the mom ...

It seemed kind of boring at the beginning, but it quickly got more interesting. I'm not sure if Trevor would agree, though. Sorry, Chern. I know it makes you sad, ...

"A young man was scrambling down the hill, and toward him, a dagger clenched in his fist. " You could cut out the 'and toward him,'. I think you have ...

"while poking at brightly burning blaze" Wouldn't that be 'a' brightly burning blaze? It really is much better than most stories I've read so far. It might be slightly clique, ...

“I went for a drink after about two hours and upon my return they had become glued together by the face. It seemed pretty permanent.” That made me laugh. ^^ ...

It feels like... molasses. Like your sinking in a huge bowl of fruitcake molasses. See, this is why I don't read your notes. They're so... depressing. That's just my opinion, ...